Since Sarah is working with me, I have started something completely new and improved.
It's sort of based around Game of Thrones and Lord of the Rings. I am super excited about it, in all honesty.
It's centered around a girl named Nymeria.
She was sold off, by her brother, King James, to the King of the North as if she was a Peace Treaty between the North and the South.
She fits in, in the North perfectly, unlike she did, in the South.
I am having a lot easier time with this, since I don't have to follow many guidelines like I had to with my other stories.
I don't have to be historically correct, or anything along those lines.
Basically, my inspiration is Game of Thrones and Lord of the Rings.
I listen to a lot of instrumental music, which helps when I am in the groove of something.
Sarah is the biggest help of all and I really appreciate all of her help.
Excerpt;
“My precious sister, you fit in perfectly,” he purred softly, walking over to me, stroking my hair, but the prince pulled me away, glaring at James.
“Don’t touch her,” he murmured, “she isn’t precious to you, if you’re just giving her up.” He was going to take good care of me, since my brother didn’t much care for me.
“Oh, Northern Prince, you have no idea how much I love my sister. She is what is going to bring this country peace,” he spoke in a very low voice, as if he was trying to be intimidating, but nothing was working.
“King James, I think you may need to leave,” the Northern King had stepped forward. He was the one, who had protected me from Fear, outside of the castle. His name was Robert. He had a husky voice and looked out for his people and his people only.
My brother looked offended, but I just turned away. I felt like I was betraying my people, of the South, but they betrayed me. I was doing no wrong here.
He was there, for a brief moment then Fear approached from behind and the guards around the room raised their hands, to their swords. Fear wasn’t supposed to be there. He was disobeying the King’s orders of not entering the castle.
I stepped backwards, glaring at the large man, who was getting his King and directing him to leave. Fear and I made eye contact just before he left. The large man muttered something and it hit my ear just so that I knew he said something, but I could not make it out.
He was the sneaky bastard son of my father and needed to fall off the face of the earth and never bother me again. I would make sure of that, one day. He would fear me.
“Don’t touch her,” he murmured, “she isn’t precious to you, if you’re just giving her up.” He was going to take good care of me, since my brother didn’t much care for me.
“Oh, Northern Prince, you have no idea how much I love my sister. She is what is going to bring this country peace,” he spoke in a very low voice, as if he was trying to be intimidating, but nothing was working.
“King James, I think you may need to leave,” the Northern King had stepped forward. He was the one, who had protected me from Fear, outside of the castle. His name was Robert. He had a husky voice and looked out for his people and his people only.
My brother looked offended, but I just turned away. I felt like I was betraying my people, of the South, but they betrayed me. I was doing no wrong here.
He was there, for a brief moment then Fear approached from behind and the guards around the room raised their hands, to their swords. Fear wasn’t supposed to be there. He was disobeying the King’s orders of not entering the castle.
I stepped backwards, glaring at the large man, who was getting his King and directing him to leave. Fear and I made eye contact just before he left. The large man muttered something and it hit my ear just so that I knew he said something, but I could not make it out.
He was the sneaky bastard son of my father and needed to fall off the face of the earth and never bother me again. I would make sure of that, one day. He would fear me.
I'm glad you're so excited about this one. I hope it can make you successful.
ReplyDeleteI found some of the wording a little awkward. "“King Jamie, I think you may need to leave,” the Northern King, and Micheal’s dad had stepped forward. He was the same guy from before, who had protected me from Fear."
I would recommend trying to draw out some of the background information, rather than revealing it all at once like this.
Also, I would like to see you with someone commenting on these. If you can't find an adult, try to find one or two of your friends who will read this blog with you. 10/12
Modern fantasy concerns itself with world building as much as plot, characterization, and the like. How will you build this world? Will you have to map it out? How will you describe the cities, towns, wilderness, etc.? Will the locations resemble characters, i.e. will they take on their own personalities? Is this world going to have supernatural threats? The complexity of world building can be ponderous to some, freeing to others.
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